Broken Glass

Hmm .. isnt it strange how . after you've read a poem you really liked,
you sit down and actuallly think .. "i have no clue where to begin with! " lol

i mean .. really.. . i'd say that you have a way with words[really] and you kept the flow pretty simple, but packed a punch.
and then i'll go point out my fav. verses..
but you already know that .
now im gonna try NOT to give a line to line interpretation of this poignant poem.seriously.. even though i want to really bad :P.
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"..Stab my heart with broken glass, let my blood gently spill.
Watch my body as it runs dry, watch my heart beat so still.."

-stab my heart with a broken glass.. how a shattered thing gently tears one into pieces.i love how you used started the whole verse.

"..Open my wrists and pop a vein, let emptiness seep through.."
-cuz all that seems to surround. emptiness.. amazingly done.

"..watch me crawl down on my knees,crawling back to you
Are you scared of what I am?, the monster that you made.
From all the lies, the pain inside is surely not to ever fade.."

-the monster.
i cant emphasize enough on the fact, that this verse paints such a haunting and painful image in my mind.with such simple words.
Brilliant!

"..Tie the noose around my neck, stop me from breathing now.
See the tears in my eyes,I want to cry but I don't know how.
Can you sense the pain I feel, the remorse that lays inside?.."
-very relatable to the previous stanza,carries on well. nicely done.

"..Stab my heart with broken glass, let my body rot away.."
- as much of a poignant write this is .. im gonna say i LOVED it .. i swear .. it sent chillzorz tricklin-ish down my spine-ish.
"stab my heart with broken glass, let my body rot away"
-after reading this,
my 1st thought was, " aah, there's a repitition in the last stanza[sort of]
my 2nd thought was, " wow, its damn nicely done"
my 3rd thought was, " *Spaced Out*"

Honest to my life..
im sorry if i made this long, but this is ust one of those poems that ust, make me think , "damn, i wish i could write like that =/"
you get the idea.
Great Piece,
Loved it.
and i knw that genuine votes are hard to come by, but this one is definately a 5!

~Wake~

These kinda poems aren't really my thing, but that being said, i don't dismiss work just cos it doesn't fit my taste...

...i do think it flowed very well and the had good imagery, but i don't really read this kinda stuff too often, so i don't know what to look for

Wow, this was amazing... I don't know what other words to use to describe this poem.
10/10

You have a gift for writind for sure , you r poem was dark and filled with emotion whether you were feeling this way or not, it's not easy to carry the feeling of emotion on the words of a poem but you did an excellent job of it , I'll be looking out for more for sure well done you did a first class job

Grant

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