Woww!!! Now seriously I have never read a poem like this before. I normally don't go for them as I have told many people on this site. It's so deep but it confused me as well I don't know why. i will be honest. Something inside of me told me to stop reading but then I couldn't because I love how you have layed the poem out...it's really interesting and I've not seen any poem like this.

This is the end.
You relish the fact, still gasping for breath; is this all we live for? A battle of life to win nothing but death?

I really like this part of the poem the most. "A battle of life to win nothing but death?" that's my favorite line though because in a way it makes sense and if you think through it clearly enough you will eventually see that in a sense it is true. We live...we die.

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Amazing poem
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Roxy

"It's not about the breaking of the heart, it's about the silence of his lips, stinging your eyes and mouth though
he's gone.
he's gone.

That's too much to say. "

^Though I loved every line of this prose that ending I have to say is best thing I've read all week.

"is this all we live for? A battle of life to win nothing but death?"

^I couldn't agree more. Are we all just bleeding for nothing, fighting continuously when we all know there's no winning?

This really made me feel, but think as well. Incredible.
Keep it up. :)
--Viola