Comments : Tears of Rejection

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    This si such a wonderful poem. It brings so many emotions to the surface.

    Distant memories encounter solitude echoes
    days of wonder tumble through time
    Clock ticks unmelodious beats
    again to hear, another church bell chime

    Sitting alone with only memories. Time measured by the only sound a ticking clock. Terrible feelings of solitude. How sad.

    Beauty seized by the hand of age
    ancient soles shuffle blind
    Love of kin remains a silent knock
    slapping the senescent, heart and mind

    It is a very sad truth how forgotten the old and sick are. Waiting for the phone to ring or a knock on the door. How many days go by without someone remembering the sadness of family members who are alone. This brings tears to my eyes.

    Tears whirl and stream the creases
    forlornness has walked it's final stroll
    Praying for the Lord's arms of comfort
    Please ! carry home this lonely soul

    Sometimes the hand of death is more welcome then sitting alone.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    This is such an emotional piece... it touched my heart.. loneliness can really be dreadful...

    "Tears whirl and stream the creases
    forlornness has walked it's final stroll
    Praying for the Lord's arms of comfort
    Please ! carry home this lonely soul"

    ^^ I read these lines so many times... so amazingly written...

    beautifully write...
    keep writing..

  • 16 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    Wow.
    that was amazing.
    definitely going on my favorites.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Congrats on the win, this piece definetly deserved it! Your title was simple yet fit perfectly for this poem. What I really liked about this piece, was how sad but moving it was. It really made me think, and you clearly stated your message, nice job.

    "Distant memories encounter solitary echoes
    days of wonder tumble through time
    Clock ticks unmelodious beats
    again to hear, another church bell chime"

    Stunning word choice and flow, you have the reader feeling so much, its just incredible. What a beautiful piece of poetry, take care, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    Congrats on the win :)
    Love Cindy

    RTVW ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Congrats on the win.

    This poem really deserves to win that. Your words are like magic - It really amazes me. The flow is like a water, flowing gently in the calm sea. Excellent poem.

    Distant memories encounter solitary echoes
    ^ One of the best opener I have ever read. It had so much impact to me.

    ancient soles shuffle blind
    ^ My favorite line. Somehow I really like the sound of the order of words you have used here.

    forlornness has walked it's final stroll
    ^ Excellent language used.

    Please ! carry home this lonely soul
    ^ one word to describe the ending. Amazing.

    Please keep writing.
    P.S. Thanks for the title suggestion. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by FallenAngel

    Love this poem. so meaningful. Great Job. :) 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Natalie84

    Luane? I almost forgot who you were? It's been so long!

    This is freaking fabulous! Wow...I'm in awe right now. Partly because I've seen it and their eyes when you walk whether or not they know who you are or not...they sparkle! People love people...especially in those times...

    Sadly beautiful!! Wonderful write! So glad I was able to come by and sample what you're doing these days.

    Off to work the 2nd half of my day...but I will be back!!!

    Hope you're doing well!

  • 15 years ago

    by D Jon Versatino

    Great work. Pretty as gorgeous woman. I love it!

  • 15 years ago

    by Nee

    I swear you brought tears to my eyes with this piece..
    Thanks for the explanation..this was very heart-wrenching Luu.
    I loved your ending..though it brings tears to the heart.
    Well done babe.
    Love you a lot xx