To My True Love

I felt the flow was a little bit off and could of been better. The structre was good. But I must say when I read a love poem I don't always like to read, "Baby" it just doesn't set the mood.

So here is your poem revised by myself, I feel if you word it this way the flow of the poem is much better and smoother.

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I sit here pondering
Of only you.
With happy thoughts,
Of how you love me so.

We are so far apart,
yet we are so close.
I cant wait till the day
I'm in your arms.

I love you sweetheart,
What else can I say?
You stole my heart,
Along time ago.

We can pass with love,
Through the distance.
Because our love is stronger,
Than anything that I know.

You're my future and past.
The sun, moon and stars.
You are my angel, my one true love
Forever and always.

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Keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

We are so far apart,
yet we are so close

That's so sweet!

You are my future and my past.
The sun, moon and stars

^^^I love these lines...they are so soft and romantic:)
You made a beautiful love poem!

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid