Call Me Medusa If You Must

"Call me Medusa if you must,
though I do believe it's
you who has become a snake.
Spitting venomous poison
while turning hearts to stone."

A real entrancing opening, this really brought me into this piece and caught my attention. I love your use of metaphors here, and you are just telling it like it is, saying who the real snake is, you're kind of acting and becoming vicious there, I like the attitude there!

"99cents for your trouble, could
ferry you to hell. Must've
been the warmth which
attracted him to the pits."

Wow, great wording that made this piece come alive to the reader. I love the way you wrote it, you set the scene/atmosphere perfectly for the reader.

"Call me Medusa if you must,
I'll give you a dollar
for the boat ride. A one way
ticket to the waste land
might heal my thirst for revenge."

Great repetition of "call me Medusa if you must", and to me this is like getting revenge, its what you have in your soul, revenge. I adore the whole idea of using mythology in this poem and you really left me speechless! Keep writing, always and forever....

I read this piece when you posted it, and now I finally back on it.

First off, the title itself is so intriguing. I love mythology, so it pulled me in right away.
Whole idea and the metaphors that you uses are, in my opinion, brilliant. Whole piece is filled with well described resentment towards someone, it seems serene in some dark way and so dramatic at the same time. The piece definitely has a world of its own, the atmosphere of every stanza is dark, but alluring in a way. I like the hints of sarcasm throughout the poem.

I fell in love with the first stanza a moment I read it. It's surely an amazing beginning. It holds so much meaning, and it's penned greatly, but the third stanza and the ending lines are my favorite, so powerful and memorable.

- I'll admit my appeal to
Hades, is no more then
subtle illusion. Though as
Aphrodite beckoned, of
course you'd answer her call-
^^^
Flawless. I like the meaning behind this, whole metaphor, the words you used, reference to the Greek mythology, whole atmosphere.

I can find beauty and elegance within 'dark' poetry, and this piece definitely has it, not in the message itself, but in the way it's delivered to the readers.

Another superb poem by you, Mel.

-Call me Medusa if you must,
though I do believe it's
you who has become a snake.
Spitting venomous poison
while turning hearts to stone.-

^You used great metaphors in this stanza, it is absolutely creative and your message is very powerful. You truly developed Medusa into original allegoric, emotional description. Beautifully written.

-99cents for your trouble, could
ferry you to hell. Must've
been the warmth which
attracted him to the pits.-

^Another brilliant stanza, it is very interesting and often you can create atmosphere which is truly breathtaking, which you've done here. Very remarkable lines, I like your choice of words and idea is very authentic.

-I'll admit my appeal to
Hades, is no more then
subtle illusion. Though as
Aphrodite beckoned, of
course you'd answer her call. -

^In this stanza you once again managed to use your great mythology knowledge to create pure artistic beauty. Cleverly written.

-Call me Medusa if you must,
I'll give you a dollar
for the boat ride. A one way
ticket to the waste land
might heal my thirst for revenge. -

^Another fascinating, truly fascinating ending stanza. Though I think that you could put word -vengeance- instead of -revenge-, that is just my opinion but that word carries stronger emotion in my mind.
Anyway I enjoyed a lot in this poem, and I honestly admire your idea, very inspiring and creative. You wrote this with intense passion and expressed so much on very impressive, indirect way.

Medusa was the woman as b *t-c h to the Greeks, now wasn't she? Such a strong character - and such a powerful poem. I admire poems that don't stream on and on but are succinct and say all that needs to be said.

Quite wonderful writing.

Call me Medusa if you must,
though I do believe it's
you who has become a snake.
Spitting venomous poison
while turning hearts to stone.
`Ooh. That's vicious. And kind of conceited LOL But then at the same time, Medusa isn't actually attractive from what I remember xD I have no real interpretation of this.

99cents for your trouble, could
ferry you to hell. Must've
been the warmth which
attracted him to the pits.
`Okay, now I ADORED this to the depths of evermore. Not only is it amusingly mocking, but extremely charming and witty. I'm getting the feeling that you're a femme fatale or something.

I'll admit my appeal to
Hades, is no more then
subtle illusion. Though as
Aphrodite beckoned, of
course you'd answer her call.
`Oh, my, gosh. I fancy this piece to the point of ... I don't know, I'm kind of brain dead right now. I love how it's like, You know you're attractive and amazing, but you're also dangerously destructive and you think it's really daft for someone to go after you, but you know you're like a goddess seeing as how you used Aphrodite :)

I'll give you a dollar
for the boat ride. A one way
ticket to the waste land
might heal my thirst for revenge.
`When I think femme fatale, I think revenge. It's odd, sort of, so this all kind of loops together and is rather straightfowardly simple to me. Maybe I'm not getting the big picture, but then it's a dark/fantasy piece.

An awesome one at that :)
Sorry I don't really have anything ... interesting to say. XD

..__MiNDYY