Silence the Innocence

Veyr powerful, emotional piece.
I loved all the poem and how well it came together. I espcailly loved the last stanza:
"Hold on tight, don't lose your grip,
Tears can't be allowed to fall,
Keep the darkness in its place,
Or beg to lose it all."
it just says alot about alot of things and that if you lose your grip on something or someone you will never get it back. 5/5, Em xx

My heart go's out to you. I have a 6yr old and she dont keep nothing from me just for this reason.

"Hush little one, don't say a word,
It does no good to speak,
The world is full of monsters,
Nightmares preying on the weak."

^^I frikken love this opening stanza..so much depth and emotion in these opening lines that it instantly pulls me right into the piece.

"Just keep quiet, it'll all be over soon,
Not a soul has to know,
Let's just keep this a little secret,
Watch as fear and shame begin to grow."

^^ I thought these lines were beautifully done...after all, I'm sure many can relate to keeping something hidden and it slowly eating away at them inside, and noone ever being able to tell, and you portrayed that beautifully within this stanza here.

"Don't cry out, not one little sound,
Just say it isn't real,
Block out the memories,
Pretend there isn't anything to feel."

^^ I found the flow in the last line to be of on this..maybe try something like :
"Pretend there's nothing to feel?"

"Cover the scars, hide them well,
It's time to play a role,
Act as if it's all okay,
Nothing is taking its toll."

^^ Again I love how you portray the act that so many people put on throughout life..I find this to be filled with so much emotion and depth that it's slightly overwhelming at times.

"Hold on tight, don't lose your grip,
Tears can't be allowed to fall,
Keep the darkness in its place,
Or beg to lose it all. "

^^ Ahhh what a beautiful way to end this haunting piece..I found this closing stanza to be hard hitting and powerful, certainly something that will stay with the reader.

I really enjoyed this.

I know these words all too well. Innocence is something so precious...but not easily protected. Keeping quiet is easy to pass the time, but hard when the time leftover is for you to think. I'm glad I clicked on your name. 5/5.

-Rolo

Well structured poem. Lovely meaningful lines. Well penned.