Wow its really good. I love how it sounds
10/10

Hold on tight, don't lose your grip,
Tears can't be allowed to fall,
Keep the darkness in its place,
Or beg to lose it all.

^^ I really like this stanza, Kris. Especially the last two lines. They really say a lot about life in general...it's like, once you lose control you will never get it back..

I've read this poem a few times, i've just not had a comment in me yet. but it's really pretty and definitely haunting. great job.

5/5

This poem is very sad and VERY powerful. I love it. Beautifully written.
Keep up the stunning work!
~Kayla
5/5

Wow this has a very strong and powerful meaning behind it, it could fill anyones shoes, it explain all kinds of pain and suffering whether it be of an abusive relationship, or a raped victim, anyone and everyone can relate to this, that is a very hard thing and you are amazing a true poet. keep it up for you are so talented your writing will take you far. 5/5

Well structured poem. Lovely meaningful lines. Well penned.

I know these words all too well. Innocence is something so precious...but not easily protected. Keeping quiet is easy to pass the time, but hard when the time leftover is for you to think. I'm glad I clicked on your name. 5/5.

-Rolo

"Hush little one, don't say a word,
It does no good to speak,
The world is full of monsters,
Nightmares preying on the weak."

^^I frikken love this opening stanza..so much depth and emotion in these opening lines that it instantly pulls me right into the piece.

"Just keep quiet, it'll all be over soon,
Not a soul has to know,
Let's just keep this a little secret,
Watch as fear and shame begin to grow."

^^ I thought these lines were beautifully done...after all, I'm sure many can relate to keeping something hidden and it slowly eating away at them inside, and noone ever being able to tell, and you portrayed that beautifully within this stanza here.

"Don't cry out, not one little sound,
Just say it isn't real,
Block out the memories,
Pretend there isn't anything to feel."

^^ I found the flow in the last line to be of on this..maybe try something like :
"Pretend there's nothing to feel?"

"Cover the scars, hide them well,
It's time to play a role,
Act as if it's all okay,
Nothing is taking its toll."

^^ Again I love how you portray the act that so many people put on throughout life..I find this to be filled with so much emotion and depth that it's slightly overwhelming at times.

"Hold on tight, don't lose your grip,
Tears can't be allowed to fall,
Keep the darkness in its place,
Or beg to lose it all. "

^^ Ahhh what a beautiful way to end this haunting piece..I found this closing stanza to be hard hitting and powerful, certainly something that will stay with the reader.

I really enjoyed this.

My heart go's out to you. I have a 6yr old and she dont keep nothing from me just for this reason.

Veyr powerful, emotional piece.
I loved all the poem and how well it came together. I espcailly loved the last stanza:
"Hold on tight, don't lose your grip,
Tears can't be allowed to fall,
Keep the darkness in its place,
Or beg to lose it all."
it just says alot about alot of things and that if you lose your grip on something or someone you will never get it back. 5/5, Em xx