I think its nice and simple..i like it alot!.. i think that it would sound better if u canged the love one...like if i gave you my love , would you embrace it?..or idk sumthing like that...mua mua mua!! i love it however it is anyways!

Nisely done, i agree with alex. But i know you and it's your style, so its good as is

I dont understand why on earth this poem is rated so low! i think it definitely deserves a 5/5..
i totally love this poem, im adding it to my favorites now.. coz its one of those quote/poems that relate to everyone, the questions that eveyone would want to say at one point or the other.. something that would become a popular... if you get what i mean.. like 'roses are red etc..'
im adding you to my favz too coz i really enjoy your style.. short but sweet. =]
xx

Wow. Its really well written. And i agree with mezmeryz. rated 5/5