Comments : Poem #4(need help with title plz)

  • 16 years ago

    by ether

    I think that this needs a bit more descriptive language to make it less literal, there's too many I's and she's in there.
    I don't have a title for you, sorry.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sharr

    Its a confusing poem i must say, i think you need to sort out what the poem is actually about so people understand more, and put more descriptive words in it:) but no trouble with any other poem! and i ent to sure what the title could be