Powerful story.
This is really good. You're a skilled rhymer.

I'd be interested to see you write some more contemporary stuff. I think you have the vocabulary and voice for it.

Wow, that was beautiful, 5/5 great job and I'm sorry for the dark emotions that caused you to write this

OH MY GOSH GURL!! that was truely amazing!! i actually shed a tear. it showed so many emotions and feelings you have great talent in this area of poetry, even if it was what you were feeling at the time you rote it..
Very very well done!!

Keep it up!
*Hunny*