This was an interesting poem. I liked how you put the description into words, i felt as though I could see it, Like I was the one having the dream.

Ease of mind no longer, only regrets remain
misty teardrops growing as city lights-
out-shined the beauty of the moon.

That Stanza changed the whole poem and really made me wonder if it should be in this catagory or if it's a hybrid poem. I read on and felt it was.

It doesn't take away from it for the most part, it does give you something that pulls away from the original setup, you had this wonderful world setup and then you pull it out from under the feet.

I think that I get what you were trying to do with it, that your far far away home is almost like a "happily ever after" and it's the only escape.

Very nicely done.

5/5

What a wonderfull poem !!!!
i can c that u r missing the old places but somehow u dont regret being where u r now thats really so deep..

4 sure i have to give u 5/5 on this

expressed perfectly

I really like your style and find no flaw at all

Another beautifully written poem
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Your vivid imagery and descriptions were so well written
i really enjoyed reading this poem.

you had me at the first stanza:
Crisp afternoon breeze mirrors a happy home
of tranquility, that lies abundantly beneath
the azure sky and white feathery clouds.

it really set the mood and caught my attention right then.

you're a really good writer
keep it up.

It really does seem quite peaceful. I guess whenever you put an actual person in a beautiful surrounding even that can;t help ease a troubled mind. Well, anyways. I thought this had great imagry. There is an excellent rhythmic pattern. I really enjoyed reading this. Really fantastic job! 10/5

What I loved about this piece is the descriptions. They weren't the same cliche wording that is used but you explained the shape and the sight of it so well. A well-expressed piece and I was glad to have come upon this. The style was easy to read and flowed continuously in my mind while I was reading. Excellent job, I have no suggestions.

5/5 from me, God bless you, child of God!

~MaryAnne