This was good although I think there was a complexity of emotions within the poem. First to Fourth stanza emphasized about the good part and the last line was the bad part. Well, I think that was a talent, coz you can easily put a twist in the poem. I liked the uneven format of the poem, kind of unique, and the rhymes was maintained. Well done.XD 5/5

Excellent a good dark and gripping story one which keeps the reader captivated to the end.
Well written and presented

Grant

Good flow, not my taste in reading but it was well written :)

Once again I thought the flow was a bit off in places and some of the words/rhymes seemed a bit forced, but other than those few small errors it was a good write. THe usage of proper capatalization and punctuation would make your peoms much better. Excellent job 5/5 GG23

I'll agree with the other comments about the flow, I think the bird and the urge rhyme, as well as the line length threw it a bit.

I don't understand why they say it's an eye for an eye in that instance.

I like this though, it's quite original and the ending is very suited to the poem.
New lines should always start with a capital by the way ;)

5/5

jess ~

He hates them all and believes they should die
but as they say, it is an eye for an eye

a very touching phrase really touch me , and i can really relate very well to my life ,

and yes somtimes, it blind us we are blind and driven eye for an eye

great poem , i love it !!

Wow, I loved it! It was dark and full of imagery that was strong and powerful, the wording was wonderful and it flowed well throughout. An awesome write.
Love Tara-Kay