Well written poem, i love contrasting poems so i loved this one. i think its good that you didn't try to make it rhyme, with the contrast it seems to go better this way. also the way you learn of the girls personality to some extent from this is quite expressive aswll. so keep it up. good work and if this is from expericnace i hope you feel better soon.

I am loving your poems!! espiecally this one!!! it almost brought a tear to my eye. *sniffle* *tear*. i love it. nice flow and good use of words. keep it up! ~KM~

I love the repetition u did with ur poem well done! 5/5! keep up the awesome work!

I really like this poem.. it had a nice flow to it.. and i could really relate.. keep it up..

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