Just Like a Taste of Ecstasy.

by Courageous Dreamer   Oct 11, 2008


The feeling I get talking to you is so ineffable.
Butterflies disperse freely tickling me with ecstasy.
Your saccharine words furbish my day so exquisitely,
leaving me with a smile that's impossible to annul.

Gazing into your azure eyes that glisten like the sea,
induces me, putting me in a entirely variant world.
You bestow your amiable lips upon mine with pure bliss,
never letting a breath escape; baby you make me speechless.

Suddenly, we both drift off discovering each others pleasures,
Exploring, as we let our lips guide us through this fantasy.
Our lips never once depart as we share a moment together
tasting what it's like to be in ecstasy floating midst the stars.

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  • 15 years ago

    by ChallengexEverything

    Wow that was very creative and extremly amazing :]

    left me speecless:]
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    Amazing job! im speechless! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    The vocabulary in this poem was immaculate! The flow and and topic were great too. I couldn't stop reading... Just... held my attention so well, which is great for poetry.

    Butterflies disperse freely tickling me with ecstasy.
    ^^ This line was my favorite. It's just written so well with such great vocabulary!

    5/5 ... definitely!

  • 16 years ago

    by InTheBeginning

    While you had some unusual well written descriptions, [saccharine words furbish; impossible to annul] you mixed it with cliche terms used in a lot of teenage love poems. [azure eyes; pure bliss.] The constant you and we words made it just about impossible to establish a connection as it feels as though the poem is being said to somebody in particular. The word baby, while an okay pet name, threw off whatever balance connection it might have had at that point. Not to say I didn't like your poem. I'm not putting it down. You have the high points with the low points and it's all about alternating until you find the right measure.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Your choice of words impressed me. Every word through the poem seems so carefully picked, and that is absolutely amazing.
    The flow of the piece is also great from the beginning to the end, so elegant and natural.
    I admire the way you portrayed your emotions here- every line is so vivid, filled with overwhelming beauty and priceless descriptions.
    I cannot find anything to critique here, whole poem seems simply flawless, heartfelt and deeply touching.

    =Your saccharine words furbish my day so exquisitely,
    leaving me with a smile that's impossible to annul.=

    Fantastic lines, memorable and filled with such passion. Beautifully writen and also truly creative.

    Overall, this poem is different from those cliche love poems that most of the people on here write. Your piece is refreshing, inspirational in so many ways.

    =You bestow your amiable lips upon mine with pure bliss=
    ^^^^
    lovely, seemingly simple but so deep.

    I like the ending a lot, too, it summed up the poem excellently.

    Keep up!

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