Aww this poem really saddened me.. it was very deep hun. touching words. 5/5

Wow...
I honestly love this piece from the beginning to the end. I've read it twice and it seems flawless to me.
It's heartfelt, and I think that you expressed every emotion excellently. Also, I admire originality of this, every stanza has great atmosphere and I really wish the write was longer.
The first stanza is fantastic, really unique. I was hooked from the first line. Also, I can relate to this write. From the powerful beginning, you managed to continue this in the same, impressive tone.
I think that this write is truly profound and creative.

Keep writing :)

Curious glances and all these sympathetic touches -
My insides are burning; There's too much to forgive.
How long do I have to stand here and fall apart?
Because I'm beginning to feel a little repetitive.

^I don't believe that "there" needs to be capitalized but this opening stanza was very grabbing.Love it.

My words are starting to feel lucid as they roll off of my tongue, and the lyrics to this song are starting to lose their passion. Sound familiar?

^yes,it does sound familiar actually-lol-great

I can't see this sun anymore, and I wish to believe that's it all a big misconception. But I don't think it is, do you? You should know, because we all know that my gray skies are due to you.
[God, please tell me what to do.]

^this stanza drew tears into my eyes because it clawed at a fresh wound-relate highly-love it!

I've taken my heart, looked at it every way,
But nothing changes the answer I miraculously form -
[You're the cause of my world flipping upside down];
And the feeling of this universe is no longer warm.

^simply beautifully put

You stole the heat.
Just like you stole happiness.
And I wish to have it back,
...Please.

^great ending-very pleading-excellent

5/5

-Amber

This poem, with it's special structure, transfers the message in a very interesting way.
There is no spicific devinition for stanzas, so you can say the poem is all over the place. Suprisingly, the flow was kept throughout the entire piece. The rhymes, which where shown here and there, were matched in the right place too.
The only thing saw was in the first line of the third stanza: "that's it all", I think it should be: "That it's all".

A lovely piece of poetry 5/5