Comments : How Do I Let Go?

  • 16 years ago

    by tigerdan

    Hi, stephanie... I hope you don't mind, if I help you. :)

    If you change...
    How do I let go
    Of the hurt...

    To...
    How do I let go
    Of all the hurt...
    Then you have the proper amount of syllables in your lines.

    Make sure you don't forget to use the spell check.

    In the line...
    trow me out like trash...
    the word trow is throw. You simply forgot the letter "h".

    I just would like to help you with your good poem, and make it better. :)

    Your friendly neighbourhood, Tigerdan. ;)

  • 16 years ago

    by tigerdan

    Hey Stephanie, I came back to read your poem again and noticed that you have made those changes that I communiated with you. It's realy good that you took my help into consideration. It realy shows me not only that my comments are inportant to you but also shows me that you care about improving. I think that your poem sounds much better. While saying that I did find one other thing aswell...the last word in the last sentence..Is it suppose to say, "forget"? with the letter, t, at the end. So good work and keep writting! ;)