This is like my story. i can totally relate. great job. i love it how u show the reality at first, tellin about how things are/should be,and in the end u know it's not that simple to u, like u know what's right, btu how much easier it is to just be wrong. u know u werent treated fair, but u still wish so bad that it could stillwork out, that why did it have to end this way. well that's what i feel. but the poem itself was pretty good, the rhyming wall very well done, u could still work on the flow though. keep up the good work
4.5/5
-azii