by Steven Topaz Oct 14, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
That forgotten feeling, |
No offense, but it gives me the feeling that this poem was kind of force a bit. The flow is not very natural (my poems aren't neither). However, the meaning does come out. |
by Jessica
I disagree with amber. i think the repetitive line made the poem more unique. almost as if it was a song. i think this was my favorite stanza. |
by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx
Honestly,the repeated line got real old,real fast.For me it made it hard to concentrate on the meaning of the poem.I had to go back and read it twice to make sure that I had understood it correctly.But being as you have a rating of 5 on this poem,I will not vote because I don't want to bring it down. |
by Kimberley
That was... wow. amazing. just amazing. I love the flow of the poem and i totally dig the last two lines. overall a wonderful write. 5/5 ~KM~ |
by Blissful
"When your tired of living off crumbs." |