I think the repetetion of that forgoten feeling really drove your point home

Very nice flow with very expressive wording

I won't lie about my comment so hope i help!
the flow did seem rocky throughout the poem, so I thought that kinda dragged down the meaning, BUT, the meaning and the idea at the end exploded into a gratifying feeling of poetry in our hearts. I hope that makes sense. I thought last 2 stanzas reallyl bordered the poem into a personal one to us all, for that a 5/5 is given

That denying feeling,
When no help will suffice.
That denying feeling,
When you pray to Jesus Christ.

-Favorite stanza in the whole thing. I really liked this as it shows how much you really have to go to just to try and get something done.

I loved the poem and would hope that there are more like this. The poem really shows the desperation that a person is in, in their very last hour.

Really amazing poem although I don't particularity like the rhyming scheme it still was an powerful and emotional poem. You made your feelings really shine through in this poem due to the amount of depth and the choice of words that you have made for this poem.
i really like the last stanza as well because it leaves a lasting effect on the reader and it brings across a strong message in peoples eyes depending on what they interpret this poem as :) Amazing poem hun.
Keep it up
Mucho love xxxx

This was a great poem. I like the rhyming, it's great. This poem is awesome and filled with emotion!
5/5
great job!

Great work, I thought the reptition really helps the poem along immensly. I loved how the 1st line was always repeated as the 3rd in every stanza.. you had a alright rhyme scheme going on as well. Anywhoo, I thought this poem deserved a 5. :]

This is amazing! i really liked the repetition.
+ its really deep and u really got ur point across and said what u wanted to say.
5/5

Dha flow was kinda off but dhat feelinqsz came throuqh ta me.
4/5

"When your tired of living off crumbs."
^"you're" not "your"

I loved the rhyming you had here. It didnt feel forced and just flowed flawlessly. Your repitition was quite effective in getting your message across and didnt seem over done so I applaud you on that. Your emotions were strong and I could feel what you were saying because it all felt so real. It was deep and the meaning behind it was quite powerful. Great choice of words and overall and nicely constructed sad poem.

Well done.
*5/5*

That was... wow. amazing. just amazing. I love the flow of the poem and i totally dig the last two lines. overall a wonderful write. 5/5 ~KM~

Honestly,the repeated line got real old,real fast.For me it made it hard to concentrate on the meaning of the poem.I had to go back and read it twice to make sure that I had understood it correctly.But being as you have a rating of 5 on this poem,I will not vote because I don't want to bring it down.

-Amber

I disagree with amber. i think the repetitive line made the poem more unique. almost as if it was a song. i think this was my favorite stanza.

And that forgotten feeling,
Where the whole world goes deaf.
And it's that forgotten feeling,
Is all that I've got left.

very deep and emotional, great job.

No offense, but it gives me the feeling that this poem was kind of force a bit. The flow is not very natural (my poems aren't neither). However, the meaning does come out.

Your conclusion is perfect. I really need to work on concluding my poems, too.