It was a pretty good writing, I think that many have been in the same situation as you.

I felt that it lacked structure. The problem with the poem is that it was more of a narrative then a poem. I think that it was really hard to follow due to the lack of structure that you have.

It was however a relatable subject and somthing that most people don't like to discuss, I will give you points for that.

I don't take away for structure

5/5

Wow! You hit the nail on the head. I'm actually in one of those situations right now. I love the woman I'm with. But yet it seems that everytime that I make an attempt to be "better", "sweeter", more sincere, I just mess the whole thing up. She'll take it wrong, or I'll phrase it wrong, and that's just not me. I've never tried to over-inflate my short commings, but i was always called articulate and romantic; yet no matter how hard I try, now that i've found someone that I love and I want to spend my whole life with, it just seems like everything is getting in the way and it might not work. All the fights we get into are my fault, but she's too sweet to let me take the fall alone. But i'm just desperately trying to keep her up on her feet above the ice. Because if she falls through and can't swim for herself, I'd drown to save her. This poem was amazing: (5/5)

That was....amazing. I have been in this situation....so many times. When there are two roads to take: Keep going the way we're headed and completely fail. Or turn and face the unknown. Which will possibly (probably) have another "thin ice" moment to face later on.

I think this is a different form of the poem by Robert Frost, in that you have to make a choice. And there is no certainty that the outcome will be positive.

This great work. 5/5 from me.

Your words of wisdom left me speechless. So many people can relates to this, including myself. These lines from your Poem/prose caught my attention,
"Being in a relationship is a lot like being on thin ice, sometimes things get so bad that one more tiny mistake could be the last one you ever make."
I enjoy my read and it left me with lots of thoughts ... known that there is always a choice but the most important make the best decision. It merits 5/5, thanks for sharing your words, kel.