Holding on to a dream

by Ingrid   Oct 14, 2008


She cries in the night
Keeps holding on
to a love already gone

She tell him to wait
and that she will change
Her looks and her ways,she will rearrange

He tells her no
she refuses to hear
In her heart he is still near

It's not that
he didn't love her
Words once spoken still linger

It's just that
instead of growing closer each day
his love died and faded away

He tells her to move on
her heart will love again
Wanting to be with her, but only as a friend

All the things you're looking for
your heart can't seem to find
when to a new love you are blind

* Written for a contest on the song lyrics:" All the things you are looking for, your heart can't seem to find"*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nee

    Congratulations Ingrid..You've managed to pen this piece perfectly =]]
    I have to tell you my honest opinion, at first I didn't think it was really interesting, usually the reader is attracted to the very first lines, but well, you managed to end it very nicely and fluently.

    First off, I liked the rhyme scheme, very captivating, I've always adored new rhyme schemes no matter how they look, this one was one of my fave :)
    Good job on this one hun.
    And wish you all the luck in that contest, you do deserve it !

    Write on
    Best of luck
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Wow great job! i could really relate to it i mean you weren't to specific with the situation just specific enough for the reader to link it to something in their life...i loved it honestly that was amazing
    5/5 ! hope you do well in the contest!

  • 16 years ago

    by kevin Boundy AKA the ghost

    Great poem love the emotion you put into it. great flow too. 5/5 (i just wrote like 10 new poems if you want to check them out)

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