I thought it would be about a person who is breaking into 1 million little pieces, i'm not far off :D. I think that it was a good poem.

"Seconds from the end, fleshing out hurricanes,
The world gasps as she starts to tumble,"

I didn't like the beginning at all. I found that those two stanza's were sub par and felt that they were inter-changeable. Even the next two stanza's didn't impress me.

My subsidiary house buys me time
While birds creep over the tin roof,
Like criminals with tap shoes.

I liked the tin roof and the criminals with tap shoes line. I felt those really added to the poem in a good way and was a tribute to the rest of it, and what came after that.

Very well done.
5/5

Very nice............ Great imagination, beautifully weaved and crafted....... I liked it...

I chose to read this poem because I couldn't help ,but see that you don't have many sad poems.Your word choice is fantastic as always and painted a good picture for the readers.5/5

-Amber