Lonley Path

Waw, well done, i like your poetic style and choice of words. keep it up.

Hold my hand and let us ride
This empty land, from side to side
Hold my hand my dear ___
If someone can light it, I am sure you can

^^ AW! This was so d*mned beautiful!
I loved the whole poem, it shows your romantic mind, but this last stanza really blew me away!
Keep writing, sweetheart, keep writing!

5/5 Ingrid

Very well done poem. I think that it's one of my favorite to date as well. I think that your a very good writer. I am going to add you to my favorites list.

I looked over this poem and it took me a moment or two to understand the meaning behind it.

It's like a person's life, it is always changing and through ups and downs there are still problems with it, but yet they still continue on.

I'm not sure why you got a less than five on this poem. the only reason I can see is possible the change in structure.

It is dark to walk alone
Trembling with fear your every bone
Life is a two way path
Because for one It weight her mass

that one where you went from all long sentences to, two shorter ones.

I think that it didn't take away from the poem...but added to it.

You get 5/5 once again.

wonderful poem!

Wow!
i really like the diction in this poem. simply yer it created a huge impact in your words..and although it is sad...the ending still hols on to hope.. for a better day...i like the detail and imagery you used.. painted a picture in my mind along with the poem. only a talented poet can do that. your rhyming is very good too gives a great to the whole poem.

"Lighting will precede the sound
But hope is not to be found
Close your eyes and walk this field
Someday your wounds will be healed"
>this stanza is just amazing.. it aborbs the whole emotion of the poem. i like the way it's starts... no hope....but like every being we still hold on... for a chance to heal...the hard chips of life are very well captured in the whole poem.
keep it up!
**Ada**
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