Wow... this is amazing, its like this wonderfully horrible love poem, or unlove poem depending on how you look at it. I love this piece, and i do believe it shall be going on my favs. list... For some reason I felt the need to say this piece with a bit of a beat, thats new, but the flow was so wonderful it sounded a bit like a song great job... 5/5

Wow! This was such a masterpiece! I loved the title because it captured my attention and although it was simple, it was packed with power and meaning.

This was different then what I usually read from you and I could just deeply feel the emotions you expressed with your flawless choice of words. I write each line slowly, savoring each wonderful phrase you put together, it was all just amazing. I loved the flow you created because the rhymin didnt feel forced and just read naturally and flowed nicely off my tongue when read out loud with no awkward stops. I applaud you on this work of art. :]

"clinging to the words you'd never say,"
^Wow that line just hit me. This one related with me so nicely and what I took from it was probably different from what you mean. When reality wasnt what I wanted it to be, I would dream of how things should be and hoped he would say things he never did. So I clung to the words he never said in reality but always said in my dreams.

"pathetic hemorrhage of wordplays"
^ I loved your use of "hemorrhage " here. It just worked so well with what you had to say and fit in nicely within the stanza. The tone of this line was so apparent in your word choice and your message was just clear.

Many people wish to spice up their poems by throwing in a "big" word here and there but they never work the word to flow with the piece but you my dear have just an amazing talent to word you poems while pieceing them to flow flawlessly.

Well done. I really enjoyed this. :]
*5/5*

"clinging to the words you'd never say,
writing the hell away to some distant constellation."
-- ...wow. I love these lines. They rolled right off of my tongue and they just sounded so beautiful.

"You're the best definition of a hallucination-
brainwash, suicidal in it's glorification."
- My favorite lines. Amazing.

I wish there was something to critique on this piece of poetry, but there's nothing! This was simply beautiful. There's no other words in describing it. I wish I had at least have the talent that you have. Nicely done. Overall: 5/5

Take care,
Stephanie

Well I must say.. this poem has left me speechless. The words you used were very impressive and how they were used without being forced was also another great thing about your poem. The flow was flawless, I didn't have to stop at all during the poem, you captured my attention immediatly with your words and kept it til the very end. Excellent write..Of course there's always room for improvement, but I myself didn't stumble across anything that was wrong. Flawless. 5/5.

Wow! I am utterly amazed, whole poem is so brilliantly written. You described so much in this piece. Atmosphere that you have created is breathtaking and the thing that impressed me most that this poem has such absorbing story behind itself that just captures readers full attention and leaves him wanting more. Words fit flawlessly and it seems that simply everything is in painful harmony in this poem. Some lines are truly bitter and that somehow made great flow. Whole poem fascinates me equally, simply amazing job on this one. You embodied every emotion within the lines, this poem impressed me a lot. I enjoyed in it, awesome, clever write. You created priceless piece here.

A very emotionally packed piece. Again, I am impressed with your word choice, simple by no means. Good flow and once again, void of forced rhyming. Great job!

Wow, I always look forward to reading your work and seeing how you play with words, this surprised me though, sometimes I find it a little hard to follow, but this was done brilliantly. Excellent word choice and expression. I really love the way you ended it, the soul giving in. Beautiful work.