Dont Judge Me

Oh yeah and I meant 2 write earlier, u don't have 2 write exactly what ur being judged 4 or what u've been through in 1 poem. What Ether said in the comment above, I understand where he's coming from, but I don't think that u HAVE 2 write exactly everything. It's ok 2 have a bit of mystery and have the person guess what ur talking about, or 4 them 2 relate in their own way even if they don't know what is hurting u.

I think that the flow in this piece was a lot better than the 1st 1 that I had read earlier. Personally I can relate 2 how u felt in this poem. I thought that u carried out the emotion well. I do think that maybe in the 2nd and 3rd stanza needs a little help. Not much. I mean it's up 2 u if u want 2 take my advice. But the 2nd stanza, I think that it would flow a little better if u wrote:

Maybe I want to be happy,
Maybe I have tried
You don't know all the times,
I have sat and cried

or

Maybe I want to be happy,
Maybe I have tried
You don't know all the times that
I have sat and cried

And the 3rd stanza:

I wish my life was different,
I wish I could change the past
But you may of noticed, I cant
So this nightmare will always last

or

I wish my life was different,
I wish I could change the past
But you may of noticed that I cant
So this nightmare will forever last

It's completely up 2 u however u want 2 change it. Or u can keep it the same. Ethier way is fine

Been through what?
Judge for what?

It sounds like an angsty, slightly immature poem. I think in this you need to say why you're "in pain"- and self loathe isn't something a fair few people on here want to read. Y'know when kids are dying of poverty and stuff.

I'd give this a 3/5.