"The miles between us are straining."
By straining I interperate it as it's straining your relationship, meaning it's slowly destroying it.
However the rest of the poem doesn't reflect this so perhaps that needs changing.

Eyes as tranquil pools is used in a few poems here and there, perhaps aim for something a little more original next time.

This was good. But not amazing. I'll give it a 4/5. Work on your originality and it'll become a 5 in future :)

jess ~

I think it's to short to put the feeling through,but noone can tell another how to write.It is nice,some words catch the eye

Very nice!!

I know this format isn't easy, but you made it look that way!
Very romantic and sweet, a definate 5/5:)

Take care!

Ingrid

This is a very cute poem.. I liked how it was sweet and how it showed the pros of being in love. There are just a few things that I feel should be pointed out though. Line three should have 6 syllables but it only has 5.
Line four it should say "Dear" not "Dare". Line 6 has one to many syllables, along with the last line. I loved the message though, just a few things that need to be fixed up thats all. Nice work overall

This was "short, sweet & simple." :] I think this style of writing works real well with a short quick thought or something like this. It would be helpful however to write a short explanation of what a Rictameter is, I myself.. know what a rictameter is.. but I don't remember syllable counts, so it would be helpful so we know if you are doing it right or not. Anyways, 5/5. I thought this was a short sweet poem that was simple but.. yet a good job.

I love Rictameters (: They are not the easiest to write. Many people make them too cryptic, when for a short chopped style like this: simplicity that packs a punch is what makes it good. So I like that you wrote simply, and emotionally; makes it easy to relate and understand. However the syllable count is off on a few of your lines:

Here is the syllable count currently:

2
4
5 - should be 6
8
10
7 - should be 8
6
4
2

A little tweaking, and it will be perfect (:

Wow erally good must have taken a while these kind of poems take hard work

Another but sweet poem, i liked the style

This is a very romantic rectameter with a flawless flow

I love it

Overall good flow, I agree with Zeenat, you should use stronger words since its so short.
3/5

This poem was very touching. It had so much emotion and the word usage was very effective... however... the syllables were off on 2 lines -- If I counted right.

I love you with everything that I am.
1 1 1 1 4 1 1 1 = 11

The miles between are stressful, daunting
1 1 2 1 2 2 = 9

Other than that this poem was excellent! 5/5

Kissing
Gentle and smooth,
makes me feel loved, safe.(five syllables)
You are very dear to my heart.

I think that the word everything can be arguably 4 syllables (e ver y thing) but when it is spoken it sounds like 3 sylables. So I think this word in my opinion can be argued either way. Hmm? I thought it was just interesting to mention.
I love you with everything that I am.
The miles between are stressful and daunting(that's 10 syllables, ya?)
but I will wait for you.
My one true love
special.

Everything else seems to add up in syllables.
some words may decieve us at times.

wether you agree or disagree, please feel free to comment. :)

I would love to be part of your club just let me know how te sign up, K. ;)

Very well done again His Angel. I enjoy reading your poems, Especially when you choose the form "rictameter".

I liked this poem and felt that it was really well done. There isn't much to say, other than the words at points were a little bit forced to make it fit into the type of rythme you wanted.

I felt that this poem was very well done and I really enjoyed the write...it's a subject that is over done on P&Q but I felt that you really made this your own.

5/5

The 3rd line only has five syllables whereas it should be six.

The sixth line has ten syllables whereas it should be eight.

The first and last line are meant to be the same in this form.

For the above reasons I didn't like this piece, it seemed like something you just threw together without caring about the end result.

However, tidy it up, fix the mistakes, and I think you could have a beautiful piece here.

Dominicanpriincess09@yahoo.com

BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!! -- :)