Wish upon a star.

by Dark Savior   Oct 18, 2008


I wish that I could find the person to call my other.
A caring heart, who loves me like no other.
I'm unsure what to look for in a woman or where to start
They say that making love is so sensual it's considered an art

I want that love that makes me feel like I'm the one,
Never to have to worry about being out done.
I wish I knew what it is that could help me on my way,
How to kiss, make love, or even what to say.

Everywhere I look reminds me that I'm alone,
I want the family, a lover, children, and a home.
Is it too much for me to ask for all these things,
Sometimes I even get nervous when my phone rings.

Truly I don't know who would ever accept those things,
So I'll sit by this phone, in hopes that one day it rings.
Soon I'll grow old, to be left by those I love.
Sitting with god and looking down from above

Perhaps I will adopt and love them just the same,
Why must we always be playing this senile game.
I'm not sure why I want to be a father so bad,
Since I was sixteen it's a dream that I've had.

I just want to be married before my mother and father die.
It's in this way that I would be able to happily say good bye.

if someone can please explain all these thoughts,
but this is something that even with my money; can't be bought

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  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Very beautiful poem. The flow was a little shaky, but otherwise it was brilliant. The word usage and concept were completely beautiful. Although it was enjoyable to read, the topic was a little cliche. But still, very wonderful write that deserves a 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This is a really honest and emotion filled poem, your a very talented writter and i think this is one of your best poems iv'e read! The flow waskept well throughout the poem so it was easy and interesting to follow ^^

  • 16 years ago

    by vintage darling

    This poem was really well written.

    my favourite stanza was:

    Perhaps I will adopt and love them just the same,
    why must we always be playing this senile game.
    I'm not sure why I want to be a father so bad,
    since I was sixteen it's a dream that I've had.

    i especially liked the second line.
    it was so descriptive and well thought out.

    i can feel the yearning and desire in the poem,
    good job :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I give true props to you, i usually dont like reading love poems, its the same thing over and over again, but this, this was filled with a different emotion, this had different words, true originalty, if you ever have such a fascinating love poem again plz contact me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "I want the family, a lover, children, an a home."
    `an should be and

    Puncuation at the end of sentences were a little awkward, to say the least. I think you should have stayed with a pattern, although the flow was decent anyway.

    Somehow I really loved this poem just for the main fact that you put the reader into your mind and told us all these dreams and wishes and feelings and emotions that you have inside you. I really enjoyed this poem, it may have been simple but I really thought it said a lot about who you are.. Great work, 5/5

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