Calling All Angels

Hey,i love this, itz a nice work. Keep it up!

I'm calling all Angels,
Because tonight is the night.
He'll die in my arms,
Again we will reunite.

This stanza is sweet and sad... I don't quite understand the last line, though... if he dies in your arms, how can you reunite? unless you are already an angel...hard to interpretate... :)

will look deep into his eyes,
And soon will feel like forever.
When the time is right,
His words will become a blur.

I like this stanza a lot... it feels like life is slipping through our fingers and there is no way to hold on to it...

Night will turn to day.
And the little time we have will fly.
His eyes will softly close over.
And in my arms he will die.

this is the saddest part of the poem... it feels like my heart breaks just by imagining it...

Tonight I'm calling all Angels.
Because now is the time.
Speaking those soft words for him.
Until again our hearts will together chime.

I love how you end the poem... even in the saddest moments there is hope to be found...

the poem is really good... it flows nicely...
the rhyme scheme is a bit lost in the second stanza, though... unless you didn't mean it to rhyme and the first and last rhyme by accident... that could also be it...

5/5
*isabel*

"Again we will reunite." << we'll

"I will look deep into his eyes," << I'll

- A lot of times 'we WILL' and ' I WILL' is stronger than We'll and I'll. BUT, you must realize that it's not just a word that you want to be stronger but a line. The words go with the lines, the lines go with the stanza. The stanza goes with the poem. Therefore, you musn't look at things like 'i WILL' is stronger than 'i'll'. Yes, at times it puts more empasis. But, there's always the whole flow thing. Too many syllalbes can screw up the flow. Which, is what happened there. (Also, the second stanza, second line has 'will' in it as well, which is just repition and isn't needed there)

Well, back to my parenthesis ... will is used way too much in this poem. Change that up.

Other than those few things, great poem. Decent emotion. Good word choice for the most part. Overall: Good 4/5