Love at first sight

This was beautifully writen. i just love it. the flow was great. the words were amazing. you made a smile cross my face cuz this is such a beauttiful poem. love at first sight it's rare but it pretty nice.
this was my favorite part.

Your name is a perfect tattoo
carved all around my heart
all time seems to stop with you
and i never want it to start

perfect taoo carved all around my heart. wow ... that just wow!! i love your whole poem. Keep up the amazing job.

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

Amazing poem, just a few tweaks. I am all for the whole no punctuation thing at times, but I really think this poem calls for SOME simple punctuation. Not the whole nine yards just periods/commas.

Your voice, so smooth and tender
I hear you speak with pride
you caught my ear without trying
"feelings rest beyond the eye"

[[Your voice so smooth and tend,
I hear you speak with pride,
You caught my ear without trying
"Feelings rest beyond the eye."]

Comments: I will say one thing with the wording in this stanza 'without trying' is too much. Maybe if you traded both words with one like... peacefully or something, that's a lot less blunt. It'd go with the poem better [THOUGH, I don't think that peacefully would fit there.]
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I turn and look your way
paralyzed in the presence of perfection
you had me embraced in your eyes.
wish just a glance in my direction

[I turn and look your way,
paralyzed in the presence of perfection,
You had me embraced within your eyes,
with just a glance in my direction]

Comments; wish = with.
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the bounds of that day vanished
to this hour I'm still in love with you
the feelings you engraved in my mind
just everything we have been through

[The bounds of that day vanished,
To this hour I'm still in love with you,
The feelings you engraved in my mind
with everything we have been through.]]

Comments: changing just to with makes it flow from one line to the next better.
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Your name is a perfect tattoo
carved all around my heart
all time seems to stop with you
and i never want it to start

[ Your name equivalent to a perfect tattoo,
Carved all around my heart.
All time seems to stop with you,
and I never want it to start]

Comment: I thought the first line could just be a little less blunt - changed the way it was worded a bit
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I will love you while the sky shines blue
these Fields of grass continue to grow
While tears of feelings still fall from my eyes
While these oceans swift a way to flow.

[ I will love you while the sky shines blue,
While these fields of grass continue to grow,
While tears of feelings still fall from my eyes,
While these oceans swift a way to flow]
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You are more then what meets the eye
behind those eyes is the man of my dreams.
And with just your hands against my skin
All hells breaking loose it seems.

[ You are more than what meets the eye,
behind those eyes is the man of my dreams,
And with just your hands against my skin
all hell is breaking lose, or so it seems]

Comments: just a few changes for flow's sake.
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I miss you, i love you
I adore you, i want you
I dream for you, i breathe for you
Its love at first sight.

sight in which shall never go blind.

[ I miss you, I love you.
I adore you, I want you.
I dream of you, I breathe for you.
It's love at first sight -
sight in which shall never go blind]

Comments: I think that if you put it together it gives it a BOOM ending. Which is a GREAT thing. :]