A Cool Autumn Day.

It's very rare to see nature poems written as beautifully as this one is... most of the time people lose their topic. It's great to be able to read one that paints such beautiful images in my mind as I read it.

I close my eyes for an instant as I envision this moment in color,
hoping to treasure it forever, as it remains within my memory,
never fading away into the dreadful colors of black and white.

Absolutely amazing finish to this poem. I adore it... 5/5 and it's more than deserving...

This is a good poem. It's very well done. I enjoyed the read and thought that you put a lot of effort into it.

I do notice that there are a lot of times where you almost seem to force some of the words and as if you were looking to something else for inspiriation. I could be wrong, and you could have just done it very quickly.

I don't see much else than that. I enjoyed the fact that you didn't write about love and how a man was holding you, but rather a tree. I think that it's a simile. I really liked it, I enjoy your wide range of topics, it keeps me coming back for more, along with other people I believe.

5/5

Nevermind, I saw voting was part of the deal, 4/5 it is.

That last line has a tripple meaning, the third meaning which you didn't write the line for I read first. As in, black and white, good and bad- which is seen not to be dreadful but untrue.
Be careful with meanings like that in future, just incase someone takes your poem the wrong way.

This is okay. It's better than most nature poems but still doesn't stand out to me as anything amazing. I think it might be a little impersonal and a little too literal.
Be careful with your vocabulary, words like 'illuminating' and 'peace' are often used in nature poems.

The great thing about this was that there wasn't any unwanted filler words to slow the poem down. And the images you created weren't bad at all.

Sorry this comment is hard to follow, basically I agree with AblissfulDREAMER.

I'd give this a 4, however I don't want to break the fives you have going. So I shan't vote. Good work, though.

jess ~

I felt myself drift away when reading this poem and loved the line;

"embosoming us with allurement"

I thought it created a beautiful picture. Although I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, I felt at times as though you were trying to use bigger words, when maybe only smaller ones were necessary. That being said, I wouldn't really change it as the imagery created is so stunning!

As others have said, and i'm sure you know it was a great relaxing poem! 5/5 x