This is really good. its amazing. i dont really like using that word because it sounds like my name but in this case it needs to be used.. this poem is how i am.

Mazie

With her lips zipped
I'd change zipped to sealed tight .
And her thoughts wide open
She walks through life
So alone surronded by friends
And since the rest of the poem rhymes , this stanza is really out of place . And repeating it a second time doesn't really work .

The over all idea is really good though , you just don't quite got it yet . Play with it a little . 4/5

This was really good. I liked the way you wrapped it up. Again, nice work!