Comments : Wishing breaks the heart

  • 16 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    U express ur feeling in a very nice way.. I like it very much.. Keep it up 5/5
    regards

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting for the unknown

    Thank you very much. i took me a while to write it in a way that i liked. i appreciate your comment :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "A lost soul once said to me
    "Don't wish
    Don't start
    Wishing only breaks the heart."
    `I loved this beginning, it was like a good attention getter, and for some reason the little rhyme of the quote just made it that much better.. really a great beginning.. :] I was quite impressed!
    **Remember to capitolize your i`s.

    Second stanza - I hear that a lot from people.. sooo much. Lots of us feel like that.. but you just have to be optimistic and patient for that person..

    Fourth stanza - Yup, truly.. you just have to wait.. and they will come along.. :]

    Again, capitolize the I's, it always makes the poem neater!

    Annnd lastly, great ending.. I see you used some different lines from the first stanza. :]

    Great work.
    5/5.