Comments : Silent Steps

  • 16 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Congratulations on winning the contest, much deserved one, loved the poem and selection of words.
    Simple and yet so deep, great poem indeed dear

    all the best and take care

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Jeannie
    Congrats for placing in the contest. Your poem is beautiful.

    Within the mist of moonlit glow
    I chanced to walk alone
    Beside the sea, the lovely sea
    To places I have known
    Inside the pitch of memories
    My heart and soul reviewed
    The thoughts that shed upon the sand
    Lost thoughts to be renewed.

    How lonely it is to be walking alone living on memories of a lost love.

    With only hurt to lap the shore
    From seas of tears that's cried
    Forgotten love that beat the heart
    Turned soul bruised up and died
    Lost lonely steps upon the sands
    Indented for the meek
    Who walk along this lonely shore
    Some comfort there to seek

    Do we really ever find that comfort? I feel the pain is just a part of who we have become.

    But bitter winds upon the break
    Of waves that beat the sand
    Come now to lend a hope of life
    To steady where I stand
    The silent steps are stricken now
    By laps upon the shore
    And faded footsteps lost inside
    The sands forevermore.

    Very sad ending.

    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy