Comments : Don't Trust The Light

  • 15 years ago

    by Minkus

    5/5. I liked how this poem was kind of quick-moving, mirroring the sinister, darting advances of the light. You did a great job characterizing here. The last two lines were awesome. Keep it up!

  • 15 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Through the mist, dodging shadows << interesting picture here! i liked the image of dodging shadows i remember trying to do that when i was a kid : )

    It advances quickly
    Coming twoards you
    A sucker punch to the back
    ^^ spelling check!!! it should be towards!

    The blinding light
    A quick surrender
    I know you can't see
    The light has always been our friend
    ^^ ah so like a twist ?! in this case the light is the enemy not an ally very unique !

    Our guide through the darkness
    Once so frightening
    Suddenly offers comfort
    ^^ so it turned again now the light is a friend now wow light is quite moody if i must say so myself it reminds me of "good cop bad cop"

    Your way out
    Changes your view of life
    The once thought friend
    Now an enemy
    Your guard turns to be
    Your assassin
    ^^ intriguing perspective!

    I am not sure if i got the concept of this poem quite right? It just was not made quite clear but i didn't mind that actually that is what i like about this poem i just enjoyed what i interpreted out of it and i think that is the essence of poetry it is an art and two different people can read two different things ! 5/5 : )

  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    Very powerful write, indeed. 5/5, Em