THE SECOND HALF OF THIS POEM WAS AMAZING, seriously , you got some great talent, and your only 15, dang im serious, your words and flow were great along with pure originalty. The first half really didnt catch my eye but your poem was amazing seriiously^^

This whole poem was really amazing. Great job. Keep writing!

I was expecting something else in this poem, like the absence of repetition but then its ok, I just said that coz you kind of noticing the repetition in mine.

Just like the paper your holding in your hands,
I think its should be youre instead of your

You aren't crushing bones like you're meant to,
You aren’t and you are i think is overdoing here

Ive noticed as well so many I’s and I’ll But its ok, we all have different way of expressing thoughts. I dint mean anything about it, its just I thought you are not comfortable using them.
Other than that, I think youre poem is great, you have youre own way of expressing your feelings.

The concept was good in this poem. The flow was decent and the word usage was great. But what really stood out was the title. The title makes this entire poem. Simply because it shows the true point to the concept and it's original.

I had a better time reading it because the title had me trapped to begin with. And the poem was right on the concept. Great write. Very interesting... 5/5

This was very powerfull and filled with great emotion! I loved it! It was kinda painful for me. I really enjoyed reading it. I think the use of punctuation brings even more power to it...

Threatening to rip words not written about you,
I say 'I'm sorry' but only because you found out.

Those were my favorite lines. they started the poem out nicely. good job. 5/5

U used the words well and the poem flows

Its original and filled with emotion

Nothin else reali to say
It was a great poem =)

I had to add this one to my favorites...
There's so much depth in it, so much emotion...
It is wonderful...
So astonishing methaphorical... :)
I loved how it begins, it pulled me into reading right from the start...
"In between us exploded into pixie dust"

There's not much more I can say...
It's just great...
5/5
*isabel*