You are a talented young girl, Temps:)
You really know how to write down how you feel and that can be a big help when you are dealing with difficult life's questions.
A really good poem, I much enjoyed:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

As always your flawless free flow is on spot The overall theme of this poem is one I am sure that many lovers, philosophers, and poets can identify with. "The distinct image of your glowing face", could be a metaphor for any number of things perceived by the mind felt by the heart and introduced to the soul and so forth. To me it is a masterpiece
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I liked the poem and found it was good, but it wasn't up to your usual par as I felt it should be temps.

There was an amazing part of the poem that really made me see that you're growing as a poet, it was just something very simple:

Asking only makes everything worse, so instead-
I'll

that line. you did a - at the end of instead. You didn't let the sentence run on and on and on. I felt that it didn't take away nor did it hinder it, but it showed your progress as a poet.

I found the subject matters was very hard to relate to and at often times hard to follow when you were transitioning between the 'scenes'

I felt that this poem is really showing that you are growing. It's a wonderful example of taking all the feedback you get and then putting it into action.

Nicely done Temps. I'm going to add you to my favorites list.

4/5

Outstanding work i must say.
It didn't have a natural flow but it made it all teh better. The words gave their own emotions very well

This complicated love continues to spark questions,
tears stream down rosy cheeks speaking my feelings.
Knees continue to become weak, ready to collapse,
awaiting the strength to lift me up and give me hope.

My fav part. Can realate very much. LOvely piece of work.
5/5

This is beautiful poem =] well done, I really do like your style of writting and I enjoy all of your poems. Each stanza flowed perfectly onto the next one in this poem and i could feel your frustration the more i continued to read on! A really excellent job you portrayed your emotions very well here =]

-The distinct image of your glowing face,
flashes quickly within my mind furthermore.
Thoughts rush over me full of happiness,
some of sorrow, others with agitation.
Impossible to erase, stitched into my heart-
remaining within my deserted soul for eternity.-

^Quite beautiful stanza, your description is very remarkable and that is a really interesting way to start a poem. I think that you built foundations of this piece here with great emotional power. Though I have few personal suggestions, though I want to say that I do not want to tell that you've made mistakes, I want to give you my personal opinion on few things within this stanza.
First of all you have -within my mind- and two lines after that-into my heart- I think that -my- is unnecessary second time because it is perfectly clear that you are writing about your emotions so maybe it would fit better if you write -into the heart or within the mind-.
I like the last line a lot, but except -for eternity- and think that -eternally- would fit better with the rest of that line. And you used -within- two times, and I think that in second line it wouldn't be less effective, or anything, if you exchange it for in or across, or something similar.

-Questions float around my cluttered mind,
searching for well needed answers to cleanse the air.
Asking only makes everything worse, so instead-
I'll just seal my lips and not let a single question escape,
yet I'm still desperate for truthful answers that make sense.-

^I admire idea of this stanza, and you portrayed picture of chaos within the mind on remarkable, vivid way. I really enjoyed in this part, though I have again some suggestions:
-in second line you wrote -to cleanse the air- but if you wanted to express that questions are omnipresent and that they appear and pollute you, maybe is better for that metaphor to have oxygen instead of air.
-Next two lines make fascinating and powerful picture, though if you care for avoiding repetition you could put -words- instead of -questions- in the fourth line.
-I don't like something about last line. I like what you tried to express but in my opinion it is worse than rest of the stanza. I don't like part-that make sense- and I suggest you to find way to put that shorter, in one word adjective if that is possible.

-This complicated love continues to spark questions,
tears stream down rosy cheeks speaking my feelings.
Knees continue to become weak, ready to collapse,
awaiting the strength to lift me up and give me hope. -

^This stanza is too simple for my taste, but I really like the strength of your emotions.
-speaking my feelings- I would personally write -reflecting my emotions- cause that picture in the same time speaks that you feel anguish and that tears reflect your source of pain, or in other words that you are crying when you try to face the source of your emotions.
in the third line instead of -becoming weak- I suggest you to put-becoming weaker- because you already described that you are feeling week.
In the last line you just said -and give me hope-. I think that you didn't give yourself a chance to express intensity of that hope. Maybe you should compare that hope with something, or put it through the metaphor which will make emotional contrast with the rest of the stanza.

-Scattered words forced into my mind struggle to connect,
to form a question, that will result in a definite answer.
When I'll find the answer is a complete mystery,
til that day, I'm left with these questions unanswered. -

^I like first two lines. No offense but I absolutely dislike third line cause you said in it same thing that you are saying through whole poem within your emotions. And I don't like repetition of -question- in the last line. I would write that on this way:
-I am left with these unanswered cruxes
till that unknown day, when I will find the answer.-

All in all this is truly good poem. Ending didn't impress me but I really like what you did with the rest of this poem and idea is very creative.

I loved this poem! The topic was wonderful and very easy to relate to. Not to mention the flow and word usage... spectacular!

I absolutely loved:
Questions float around my cluttered mind,
searching for well needed answers to cleanse the air.

Those lines were just written so well.. and stood out to me. I don't know why.. they just really put this poem together for me. Great write! 5/5!

Temps
am 2 late to return
only one answer to ur questions
5/5
the flow was proper
the idea expressed
keep writing

"Asking only makes everything worse"

I honestly felt that this was the strongest line of the poem, not to mention the truest. It seems that when we seek answers we often put ourselves into more trouble and heartache. A very strong, heartfelt write with great imagery and flow once again. I'd really like to see you rhyme a lot more with the talent you have : ] Excellent job though 5/5 GG23

The only thing I noticed where the non-capitalized first letters of some of the lines .. Even though they're not new sentences they should be . It just .. Bothers me . But other wise , your words flow really nicely . I love the idea , and I think you're very talented . 5/5

Aw Temps :]
I like this piece.
your wording was perfect and the whole piece was really heartfelt.

This complicated love continues to spark questions,
tears stream down rosy cheeks reflecting my emotions.
Knees continue to become weaker, ready to collapse,
awaiting the strength to lift me up and give me hope.

This stanza I think was my fave one :) it was pretty catchy than the others..at least for me. well done !!

Very good job on this piece.
Write on xx

I feel this is one of your stronger pieces, and ironically it describes weakness. Someone that is facing the difficulties of love or the perception of emotions. I think that the thoughts play a very strong role in this poem and I like how you used the line "I am left with these unanswered cruxes"

A nicely added line in my opinion, I think that it may seem small, but with some thought it means quite a bit. With the assumption of "unanswered cruxes". To me they are much like blind spots within relationships. Voids of love that reflect little interpretation. People in a relationship have to place their faith into a respectfulness that they love and trust. Regardless of their ambiguities, if the love held is indeed true then they those two people will have all that is necessary in the long run.

Excellent work.

Hey i just wanted to let u kno u did a real good job u put ur emotions in it and i can feel where u were coming from,good job kep it up!

Well even i am not a fan of non rhyming ones but i actualy enjoyed reading this one

questions with no answers

some never have answer with words!
the most important things in life are felt with the heart and not with words
great one tempsy!!

feel your answers with every touch and look
5/5

.. This is very easy to relate to . Your flow is really good , and the lines flow really nicely one into the other . I have nothing bad to say , I think this is amazing . Very well done ! 5/5

This is beautiful. I loved the imagery you've employed, and the format of your poem. You did a stupendous job. :) 5/5

Bri~