Incomplete kiss (...)

by Freedom   Oct 25, 2008


Yeah!Someone needs evenings,lonely evenings
Why?No answer for this question.
Maybe!For someone to wake up,find some strenght
For someone to escape from troubles
Or maybe to sit alone for a while.
To hide their loneliness.
And find some shoulder to put their heads on.
But it takes only one look to u,and I understand what means comfort
And only with my eyes touch i understand what means tenderness
Why,how,words dont have rhyme.I cant make rhyme (maybe I never could)
Maybe I lied to myself.By the way you never needed words to understand me
You understood when i had bad times.
When I was happy I shared my happiness with you
When I had sorrow,you took it away.
Thank you.But I guess we even haven't got a day without fights
Im'sorry,for that I left,but I havent got any choice.
World changed to other side,even I gave half of myself to you.
It wasnt enough for us to wake up together.
Night,dark,i hear your voice.I rem,ember when it was mine.
My luckiness gone away,even I held it tight.
I remember 2006 Autumn,when started thing which I could call a fairy tail
Its not hard to remember everything,but I believe time will go on (time will run)
And instead my memories will be only some dusts
You know,I'm trying to fool myself.I guess now I wouldnt have courage to hug you
Not one hour and not one week passed,time goes on,and it will never be the same.
I have many questions,but there is no answer.
Hard,but I'm trying.I promised not to fall apart-
But i guess needlessly i trusted on myself.

And if i could change everything (I would)
And if i could take your sorrows (I would)

And when you wake up and feel some strange feelings in your heart
Believe,I had hard night,minds was surrounding about u.
I beleive in future,I believe in you,I believe you won't forget
I believe you wont forget everything what was precious to us.

Only on my mind I'm still with you.
Only on my mind I'm still touchhing you.
Only in my dreams..I kiss you

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this poem was created by my friend request. *Freedom*

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  • 15 years ago

    by AnCi

    Wooow!! 5/5 definitely!!
    This poem has no rhymes but it is one of the best that I have read! I caould actually feel the feelings that you are writing about.. WoooooW! is all i have to say!=)

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Again, the emotion is very strong. I usually enjoy reading more structured pieces, as it was hard to stay focused. There were a few grammar mistakes, but no big deal. Anyway, the poem it self was very meaningful and heartfelt. To me that's what makes a poem a poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by PlasticSmile

    This reminds me of my ex when we broke up. Great emotion and sadness in this piece. loved it.

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    It needs some work on the grammer, i also understand the part about no rhyming but she needs to work on the flow a little bit. it was to me like bits and peices of information that was scrambled to try and create a coherent piece. But i saw the emotion and it was raw and understandable throughout piece. in other words it was a decent write in terms of showing what she felt but all she needs to do know is put into a sense of flow.
    - Raindrops 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Aww laisve

    this poem is so touching...what made me really like it that it has no ryhme but honest and straight words from the heart.

    the ending was wonderful:
    "Only on my mind I'm still with you.
    Only on my mind I'm still touchhing you.
    Only in my dreams..I kiss you"

    great job laisve

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