by Baby Rainbow Oct 26, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
I thought that all you adults care |
by Em
Very deep but I do believe that some adults know what's happening at home and just turn a blind eye which I don't agree with. 5/5, Em |
by Saving Grace
I totally agree, and understand what your saying. Adults need to open their eyes to what is going on. The poem was well written, and flowed well, it tells a sad, but true story. I will say though, that it started strong, and it followed through the rest of the poem strong, until the last line, it was good, i just don't think it ended quite as well as the rest of the poem. But i loved it. Keep it up. 5/5 x |
The rhyme scheme did not take away the power and emotion of the poem at all. I thought the poem was peiced together very well. The thought behind it although saddening can be very true at times, but thankfully it all gets better. I really enjoyed reading this poem, one of my favorites by far. 5/5 |
by Miu
Aww I'm so sorry if u going through this. |
by mandy
That was very beautiful, great job. I love the emotion. defanitly a 5/5... |