There's too many filler words in this, and a few too many I's. I'll change the first stanza a little so you can see what I'm talking about but if I do them all the comment'll be too long.
"While I gaze into your eyes,"
Gazing into your (descriptive word to add meaning) eyes,

"I can see the forming tears"
I can see them forming tears
or (better still)
I can see tears forming
"the" is a filler word.

"Of an inexplicable joy mounting up,"
Inexplicable is an awkward word, unexplained is shorter and easier to read in this line.
You don't need "of" or "up" in this line. You don't mount down, and "of" is a filler word you don't need there.

"The longer I stare..."
I think this should be "I stare..."

If you read a little more poetry you'll learn what's a filler word and what words you need for it to make sense, it comes with a lot of reading, so don't worry if you don't get it straight away.

Other than that, I respect that you put punctuation at the end of your lines, hardly anyone does that and I find poems without it so hard to read. So thank you.
Also, the theme of this poem, while written about a lot, still seemed unique, like you had put your own spin on it.
Good work, watch the filler words and the line lengths in future, 4/5.

jess ~

I really enjoyed reading this emotional piece. The way it was written was so unique, yet it held the poem together beautifully. The flow and word usage are very astonishing. And the concept, although simple, has been portrayed differently then I've ever seen it before. It's originality had me trapped... great write! 5/5 for sure!

The flow and wording really stands out as much as the romantic imagery
I don't know what to say except beautiful
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Again, the way you describe every moment is so meticulously done and creates such a beautiful piece.

Your tiny eyelashes,
Replicate the whole lot about you
A destined beloved half,
Joyous the heavens, now that we reunite.

this was my favourite.

keep up the good work :)

(I can see the forming tears)

i like this line...... great poem....
a new piece. well i like this poem
i havd a gd read.......

(To such beatific face,)

i like this line as well
i really like the way u write.......
5/5 for this. ;)

The flow was outstanding. It reminded me of works I've read by Edgar Allen Poe.Very deep and emotional.

In the night upon a day's fight
Thoughts of you,
Brought warm feelings.... Across the freezing nights
Leaving images of love in its path.

These were my favorite lines, They were so powerful and they really tied it all together. 5/5
Great job

Awww this was adorable!! clever though to !! the words were not cliche or boring or generic in any way they were very very complex but used to get across an adorable feeling you have for this person!
the only thing i would ever suggest is making the lines somewhat the same length ! it might help with the flow a little !!

5/5

Descriptive word after descriptive word you captured the image of this person beautifully. Their facial features put into beutiful detail, with added lines, afterthoughts as if your mind wandered off while thinking of this person. This description captivates the audience, your strong feelings imediately seen.

And the ending, was yet another great part of this poem. This poem didn't have the ending I had expected, caged by your lovers charms. It was interesting, different and full of beautiful emotions. 5/5