by rainbowliciouz Oct 27, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Rain pouring down |
Wonderful write. The flow of the poem was good, but could of been better with some puncuation. I can't stress it enough, puncuation is a big part of making it flow better as well the overall structure (which in your case is good except for the fact you have no puncuation) |