I liked the piece and I enjoyed the read. You threw in words at points I feel though, just to throw them in there.

Well there is something I hated about this poem. The ending and how you had to explain why you are writing 'cliche' pieces. I don't think that you should have to explain that to anyone. You write what you write for a reason and if you want to share it then go ahead, but you shouldn't feel compelled to tell anyone why you write it.

I think that this poem is what you are good at, this specific catagory and it's getting a five from me, because this is what I feel the piece deserves.

You shouldn't force words, I found some words that I felt you put in there because you felt they needed to be there...or they should be there, in actuallity they didn't really make a difference.

5/5