The burden of the reaper

Millions of haunted voices
ringing within my ears

*I would change "within" to "throughout" that sounds better to me.*

all singing the same tortured song
A message i no longer wish to hear.

*This was a really strong way to open a poem. I love the metaphor I thought that was clever. Very haunting image here. Also make the "i" in the last line "I"*

two of their tears are never the same

*When you say "two" that confuses me I'd say "None" or something like that*

Now you hear the ballad
always upon their frozen lips
and listen as all other thoughts
their sepulchral tune doth eclipse

*Love the langauge here :) it was flawless and adds mre to the metaphor in the first stanza. I love that. Very creative*

This is what is always

*I would change this to "This is what plays always" or something like that, becasue the way you had it, made it difficult to read.*

with you care-free life

*Should "you" be "your"? Anywho I really liked this. The concept was a new one for me and I enjoyed the piece as a whole. The imagery was very strong here and made this come alive. Very nice. Nik*