Just Waiting For the Darkness to Kill the Sun
by XxLonelyLovexX Oct 28, 2008
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My heart is screaming |
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16 years ago
by BK Butterfly
Sad,
but beautifully written. -
16 years ago
by Wake
Holy Crap.
This is was the BESTest short piece i've read in awhile.. ow man.. i cant explain this ..
Such, Such a poignant write.
it made me wanna get up and start screaming and sometimes you read something .. that ust puts all your feelings in words.. i Love how you reached out to the reader in such a self descriptive way.
Great Work.
The starting 4 lines set the reader in perspective, nicely done.
"..Life is passing on
and I don't want it to
for I don't want what's next
I just want it to be through
I'm slipping behind
and losing my friends
I see no point in caring
since everything ends
My feelings are taking over
and my thoughts, you don't know,
are slowly killing me
in places that don't show
No one left can save me
for I don't wish it done
so I'll lie here waiting
for my darkness to kill the sun.."
i am truly in AWE of this little piece here.. the wording was pretty simple and AWESOME ..
such a pensive,far cry right inside.Superb work, this poem caught me by surprise. Great Title too.this has such an amazing feel to it.Powerful and Poignant.
KEEP IT UP!!
~Wake~ -
16 years ago
by Wake
Holy Crap.
This is was the BESTest short piece i've read in awhile.. ow man.. i cant explain this ..
Such, Such a poignant write.
it made me wanna get up and start screaming and sometimes you read something .. that ust puts all your feelings in words.. i Love how you reached out to the reader in such a self descriptive way.
Great Work.
The starting 4 lines set the reader in perspective, nicely done.
"..Life is passing on
and I don't want it to
for I don't want what's next
I just want it to be through
I'm slipping behind
and losing my friends
I see no point in caring
since everything ends
My feelings are taking over
and my thoughts, you don't know,
are slowly killing me
in places that don't show
No one left can save me
for I don't wish it done
so I'll lie here waiting
for my darkness to kill the sun.."
i am truly in AWE of this little piece here.. the wording was pretty simple and AWESOME ..
such a pensive,far cry right inside.Superb work, this poem caught me by surprise. Great Title too.this has such an amazing feel to it.Powerful and Poignant.
KEEP IT UP!!
~Wake~
