Comments : You're Here

  • 15 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Its pretty amazing how having such a close friend in life can make things a million times easier, gives you that comfort that no matter how hard life gets you'll never have to go through anything alone. The flow of the poem was pretty and the topic very relatable for most I'd have to say from personal experience. Maybe change a couple things around to help the flow.. for example, last stanza second line I'd suggest making it "All come together in the end" Not very many mistakes, maybe just that one to be honest.. all in all a great write 5/5 GG23

  • 15 years ago

    by Raychil

    I loved this poem. The assurance of having someone there for us is always a huge weight lifted. Someone to love us and dry our tears. Friends like those are hard to come by. Keep them forever. Wonderful work. Beautiful.
    <3Raych

  • 15 years ago

    by KJ

    The emotion in this write needs an applause! You had an amazing flow to this poem as well as an amazing choice of vocabulary. The fact that you chose to keep your choice of words simple, and said so much, makes this brilliant.

    "Although I seem strong
    I too, have been hurt
    I have moments of regret
    As I struggle to exert"

    --I would take the comma out of the second line. It creates a pause, and I believe that it would be a better/continuous flow without it--

    But other than that, wonderful job Loni.
    5/5