Comments : Sucide

  • 16 years ago

    by Wake Me Up

    I sit down feelings emptyness
    ^^^
    An awkward first line but I think I know where you are coming from.

    thoughts racing through my head
    thinking finally this is the end
    ^^^
    I liked these lines. It made me feel like it's done, I don't have to deal with you are this anymore.

    where the pain and suffering end
    where the agony of this life ends
    ^^^
    These were my favorite lines. Very intense,

    at last i get up and stand on the chair
    grab the rope and fit it around my neck
    I feel a teer run down my cheek
    ^^^
    It made me feel like you almost regret putting the rope around your neck.

    and as i step off the chair i feel the rope tighten
    i have one thought the whole time i hang there
    . . . . . . . .why didnt i do this sooner
    ^^^^
    I really like the way you ended the poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by CY GINDLE

    Mannnnnnn you must think of this alot
    I feel your thoughts of suicide in all your poems. don't do that you'll just piss god off and he'll just send you back to a worst life
    so hang with this one and make the best of it aleast you tried and thats all anyone can
    expect of you