I can really relate to the disappointment expressed in this poem |
I loved how you turned around the saying "Keep your friend's close, but keep your enemy's closer." It was a new way of thinking, I guess. The flow was really good, no awkward pauses. |
Beautiful poem, excellently written, flawless flow, easy to read. Very expressive, full of pain, love, regret and anger. Excellent. |
I really like it and totally agree with the ending. 5/5 |
This is a poem with a common theme; basically of a relationship not working out. Though sometimes poems with this theme can get so tedious, because they all sound the same. This one was different though. You developed a theme within the theme, of lovers turning to enemies, and kept true to this the whole way through. |
I would probably start each line with a capital, no matter what word it is. Seems like you tried to make this poem rhyme, but you rhymed words together that don't rhyme....why'd you do that? The one good rhyme doesn't even count because you spelled lose wrong (loose) and it sounded like choose. Together/Another, Example/Angle, Far/Heart... none of those rhyme either. Finding one or two minor mistakes like a puncuation error is nothing compared to spelling mistakes and unmatched rhymes. |