Hmm .. I perticularily like this one mostly because it reminds me of Edward Cullen from the twilight saga : ) . Haha i don't know if that's what you were going for , but honestly .. It's crazy . If you've never read the series , then you just wrote a poem reflecting an idea that has made millions . Very well written , lots of dark emotion . 5/5

Dark And intriguing. Full of deep and raw emotions. You did an excellent job on this peace. Well written 5/5

Very interesting.

I like how open you left the poem for readers to interpret the meaning; if your dark and unsettling, scared you may hurt someone, or just dont want to get hurt yourself.

I am not a big fan of free verse, but it really worked here. It seemed to me that your mind just spat out lines and warning; no specific direction or flow, just random thoughts that came up.

Your words flow so nicely one line into the other .. I really enjoyed reading this piece . Amazing imagery , I hope you keep writting . 5/5