Nice rhyme sgheme.... I like it=] good job=]]]5/5

Wow. that was raw and powerful and i loved it. this is going into my faves. 100/5 ~KM~

I must say that I'm impressed which is not an easy feat to do. I can say that the way you described things, that someone isn't to blame, it's all about the other things, it's like passing blame off...very well done.

There are some flow and rythme problems in the poem, but nothing overly major, perhaps the first stanza, but that's it.

I think that this poem is one of the best that you've done.

You're a very talented writer with a unique sense for things. I would definitely keep writing.

5/5

Well, it was an interesting theme. You have one error in the poem.

It is (Satins) punishment,
= Satan's

Death...(Flame)...Burning...
= Flames (better flow in my opinion)

Death...Flame...Burning...
^ Death and burning flames.
Flames and burning is like 1 meaning or whatever. So I think it's better if you combine it.

Wow this was some poem. powerful and strong. i like it! it was very intracting to read. some say we already live in hell it's our earth. but whatever i have no idea why i siad that but back to you. it was awesome! please do keep it up! i shall be reading on...

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

I like it, in a way somewhat soothing, and ironic

I really enjoyed your personal take on Hell. It was very dark and kept me interest from beginning to end. There was no problem with the flow here and your choice of words were nothing but simple making it that much more interesting to read. It was filled with power and with strength adding to the deep meaning expressed throughout. Great use of imagery to create the scene how you see it.

Well done.
*5/5*

I liked your point of veiw on hell it was one I have not seen before. The wording was great and so was the flow. This was an easy read. I gave it a 5/5. Keep up the great work =)

I really enjoyed this poem. I'd have to say that in the beginning I felt that it lacked something. What? I'm not quite sure, it just felt empty. So, maybe emotion. I liked the idea of it. The poem could POSSIBLY make some people realize things such as this. I think that it's well written and you've done a good job putting your thoughts/emotions into the poem.

Hell, a very blank name but hell is a strong noun which makes the title of this very withdrawing, it was the first one that caught my eye, Im critical when i do comments, so hopefuly i can help you and you will think its praiseable, (so many people forget)

First Stanza: Not the best opening stanza, first stanza needs to be as good as the last so we have the intrest to keep reading, look at your views you almost have 1000 and only 7 people commented, imagine if the first 4 lines made them go Damn, lol anyway, I don't understand fully the simile of Hell and a Shell, and its an awkward ryhme, but it could just be part of your poem.

Second Stanza:This is much better, would of loved to see this as the first one, if the second line would of been a little longer flow would of been perfect, the last two lines were outstanding "hell it's self isn't to blame" oh so true, if it weren't for sinners, hell wouldn't exist.

3rd Stanza: The similes and metaphors are weak but the story that you are telling the way you are explaining hell makes up for it, nothing very wrong with this one but nothing to good about it, its an ok stanza,

fourth stanza:evil and devil dont ryhme unfortunatley , The first three lines are very good , but then the last line i feel is very forced and out of place or something that i call "deadwood" I like the way you refer to satan its self in this poem

Last stanza: ooo very good, i just now thought of that, i knew it but i dont think about it, satan was sent there for his own punishment and all satan kinds are sent there with him, except for living in a shell I dont think you explained that enough,

Flow 4/5
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Ryhme 4/5
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Emotinality 4/5
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Impact 5/5
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Overall 4/5

Hey I never thought of it as having to indure satan's hell and not my own. love the idea. At some points in your poem I did get lost a little bit, but that's probaly because some parts read differently than they would if you were writting a short story not a poem.

Any who loved the imaginitive view point.

Thanks for the read.

>~Spirit~>

Another one of your poems that is not my favourite. The flow seems to come and go, and the ideas behind the poem seem a bit atskew at moments. But, the main idea is very original, and it is presented in a way that isn't disgustingly childish or familiar. Thank you

Peace and prosperity,

(RKD)

Very powerful! absolutely loved it!!

He is the keeper of the dead,
But if they are evil
Into the fire they are fed.
Do not blame the devil.

that part is sweet but its so true this poem is way dark but i like it alot its goin in my favs as are you 5/5

This reminds me of my poem, *Holes of Fire*. It really tells deep, of your understanding on this. Amazing..