Rachel
You did a fantastic job on this form.

Sands of time, a world sublime
This unforgiving life
Try you may, and though you pray
The pain cuts like a knife

You know as I read your words I felt your pain and every tear you cried.

Easier each day, or so they say
Time will heal the saying goes
Tightening rope, loosing hope
Despair that no one knows

I have felt this despair. Time doesn't heal the pain. You just become comfortable with it because there is no other way to survive.

Thinking negative, no more to give
Live each day as it's your last
If you were gone, they would go on
Left with memories of the past

Yes they do go on. Tomorrow is never promised. Try to find the good you have. Even in the smallest things.

Gone but not forgotten, begotten
A shame things turned out this way
When in need, a friend indeed
Came to save the day

You know no matter how dark things get for you. My hand is there for you to hold. Just like I held yours when you were little.
Excellent job on this write.
I love you
Aunt Cindy

One of your best? I don't know... each of your poem is so good.

'Easier each day, or so they say
Time will heal the saying goes
Tightening rope, loosing hope
Despair that no one knows'

Fantastic stanza... my fav one...
Wonderful write on a difficult form of poetry!

Hey, I love this form, especially the internal rhyme. You have made an execellent job with this form.

Michael

I like this form also the write itself is really good. So much of it is so true about life and people. I've not heard of this form..should try it. Excellent write.
Take care.

Very nice! and great job following the rhyme scheme. very emotion-felt. thanks for sharing!

I enjoyed reading this. The use of this form was excellent and the emotions are heartfelt. I applaud you on a job well done.

Great job!! i really like it!

An intensely sad poem, written in what appears to be a very difficult format.
I got all sad reading it and felt sorry for the one you described here...I think I know who it is:/

Beautiful poem, Rachel:)

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