1st stanza -
"Put a house on top with loss of judgment."
`I could be wrong but I think there is a e in judgement - between the g and m.
`Very unique, I have never quite seen something like this before in a poem. It intrigues me, and I want to read the rest of the poem now. :]

2nd stanza -
Unique yet again, I guess I don't see anything wrong in this stanza.. it was good, what you were trying to get across was kind of difficult to comprehend but in other words, no gramatical errors.

3rd stanza -
"Because when we were offered two we took one,"
`Confusing. You were offered two of what and only took one?

4th stanza - Flawless. I actually started to get back on track and started comprehending the poem much better. It became a bit clearer to me towards the end.

Wonderful poem, yet sad. There were a few times I got confused, but that just showed the uniqueness that your poems hold.. they make you think. :] At the end, I understood the meaning of the poem which worked out very nicely, if I left the poem not knowing what it was about, that would have been a problem. Lol. Anyways..

Great work.
5/5.

I really liked this poem. It might take some people a little while to understand it fully. Hmm, i dont know what else to say about it. It is a good poem. 5/5

'Split decisions and blunt incisions,
Trying to cut the ties with you,'
I really like those two lines.
The ending of this poem was extraordinary, it made it all worthwhile for me.
The tone and voice in this poem is much different than in the other ones of yours I've read. I do like it though.
I think that it would flow better and be less confusing (well, I guess it isn't confusing, it just sets off my grammar alarms) if you put the article 'I' at the beginning of the first line, just to put it all in perspective.
I also like how paradoxial some of your statements are, like 'all too soon, all too slow' I love that!
I don't think this is the best of yours I've read, but it's definitely a great write. I can't decide whether or not to give you a 4 or a 5, I really wish there were a 4.5 button!

Very nice free flow with great personified natural metaphors
I am impressed

WOW, that was a truly capitivating poem, i especially loved the first stanza, it was truly flawless too many, i loved how you described things. Nice work

This was very creative. You don't talk about what others talk about in sad poems. about cutting or losing someone just out like that. You put into other words and form to get your point across of how you two did get eachother of what you did out of other words, you did an amazing job. I really like this one.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

Split decisions and blunt incisions,
Trying to cut the ties with you,'

Those lines were so great. they just kinda hit me n i was like :O!

It is very different to the other sad poems but its very powerful and fantastic =)

This poem made more sense to me than the "Lighting" poem. Your poems are original and have a very interesting way at going at it. Keeps you on your toes. I love the ending the most, yet its sad. It burns the image into my head seeing this guy walking away through the flames into the night. You are awesome at describing and makes it easier to picture what you are saying in the poem. 5/5 Very nice poem =)